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Sunday, 19 March 2017

Goldy and the bears.

Goldy and the bears.


Hi Im baby bear my name is D.J and I live in my house my mum was making porridge so then m y Dad went hunting for rabbits ,I was in my bedroom playing on my p23 . “D.J come please” my Mum yelled I zoomed down the stairs and I came “what’s for breakfast Mum” I said in a cheerful voice .

Some bowls and plates were broken to parts and Mum was crying I told her what had happened and she said ”when I went to get honey from a beehive and came back I saw THIS!” . Then a Ninja came out from the shadow with blond hair I'm “the one who did all of this “ RKO from nowhere” I howel and RKO the enemy and battle began.the strong Goldy was a coward ninja running past my Dad and found out I bashed her “that’s my boy“ Dad yelled.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Khema,
    I like your story but a need to use punctuation's for the story to make it easier

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  2. Hi Kshema,
    I found your doc funny and interesting. I love the name D.j as well. I also found it very funny when suddenly somebody shouted, "RKO out of now where!!".Maybe next time, could you add commas to make sure your writing makes sense.

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